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Learning out the past has no value for those of us living in the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The importance of
history
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today's
todays
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belive
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 that learning from events that happened in the past is irrelevant.
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am entirely disagree
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 with
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 statement. One of my favourite
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, in one of his famous
song
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 stated: "If you know your
history
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,
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 you will know when you are coming from". I have to admit that
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am completely agree
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 with
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 in the modern days.
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, learning from the past generally helps us to avoid repeating the same mistakes twice even though it is not always the case and there is not guaranteed
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success.
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,
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 could be seen as a do and do not list rather
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that
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an
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old, irrelevant events that happen in the past.
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, many successful people
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often
 have a wide
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history
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 background in order to well know how to deal with people.
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,in my
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history
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 often answers many questions
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 life, what brings us here and how we have achieved what we have at present. A recent
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 conducted by the
history
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 University in Washington Dc explain
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, how todays Covid-19 pandemic could have been avoided if we looked at the past devastating viruses in the
medio
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media
-eval era and how they fought the infections.
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 why
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am completely disagree
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 with the question
promt
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 and why in my opinion
history
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 is an
imprtant
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important
 subject that everyone should have a
backgrounf
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background
 of.
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