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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The
language
 barrier is one of the biggest social, professional and practical challenges for
community
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the community
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 who live in a foreign
country
 and
this
 is sometimes so severe that many
people
 find it hard to fit in and manage a job.
This
also
 can lead to frustrations and sometimes affect the well-being of
such
people
 and there is no denying that
people
 living abroad without knowing the
language
 are the worst sufferers.
To begin
 with, migrants who do not speak or understand the native
language
 fail to understand the local custom and culture which leads to social problems. They hardly talk to local
people
 and have little idea about the cultural diversity of the
country
. As the result, they even fail to realise the rules and regulations and how
people
 feel in certain circumstances. The influx of immigrants in many European countries,
for instance
, cause social problems because of the newly arrived immigrants, social crises, discriminatory practices and many times violent reactions and racism.
Therefore
, the migrants develop an antipathy towards other residents and local
people
 and segregate themselves from others.
Moreover
, not knowing the local
language
 makes it harder for immigrants to find a direction, read important notices, order food from a menu, talk to the local citizen for help and most importantly manage a job. It is quite natural that an employer would prefer someone who can communicate with
people
 of the homey and the
language
 barrier, according to many
settler
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, is the leading cause they remain unemployed. Not knowing the
language
,
furthermore
, causes many practical
complication
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 which are unavoidable. In conclusion, before immigrating to a
country
,
people
 should make their best effort to learn the
language
 that most population in
this
country
 talk and understand to avoid cruel social unrest and practical problems.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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