Some people say music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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It is often said that

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music

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is the connecting bridge between different society,

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groups and even countries too. I do agree with the

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statement and I will

eloborate

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elaborate

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essay that how

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play

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a major role.

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with,

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has

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communication path for all the cultures in the world. if

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the soal's deepest though and express in melodious voices and songs which accumulate all the people, whether he or she from any region or religion.

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, India has

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of states which have their own thinking process, rituals, cultures;

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, it

collabrate

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collaborate

all person's in

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bridge.

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, one

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director can unite all types of professionals from various cities of

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or nations and compose a fabulous sound which can put us in

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the mood

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of swing.

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, there is no

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limit to

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the

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although

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different

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people enjoy their songs with any

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group person.

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, it is frequently noticed that even if you am from any

country

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, but you like any nation's

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or song, and you can enjoy it with any range of

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person.

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, when we go for visiting any European

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where

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clubs running with enhanced sound system but we do visit that place and participate in dancing with their culture and any

age

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of citizen which rejuvenate our mood and joined all

toghether

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together

. In conclusion,

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does not have any barrier in terms of culture,

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religious

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age

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. It is the

defination

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definition

of unity.

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, I believe that

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music

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is kind of way to attach everyone with their province and customs without any restriction.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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275 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

universal language
evoke
connect
diverse audiences
cultural exchange
generational gaps
shared experiences
unifying force

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