You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English- speaking friend. In your letter - explain why you changed jobs - describe your new job - tell him your ither news
Dear Ali,
I hope you are doing well. I have not heard from you for weeks. The reason I am writing
this
letter is to tell you that I have been working in a new corporation for a couple of weeks.
As you already know my former employer who
I worked for did not increase my salary for years and the company did not pay the salary on time and it was paid withChange the pronoun
whom
3
or Correct article usage
a 3
5 days
delay. Correct your spelling
5-day
Therefore
, these factors made me dissatisfied with my employer and I decided to look for a new job.
In my new position, I have found new friends who have my back and I feel they are like my brothers and sisters. Besides
, my salary has been paid on time. Furthermore
, whenever I want
to take a day off, he would accept my demand.
Anyway, I am glad to tell Wrong verb form
wanted
that
I will get married in two weeks. So, I want to invite you to my wedding.
I look forward to seeing you soon.
Best wishes,
KhashayarCorrect pronoun usage
you that
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