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Some people believe that technology such as mobile phones have destroyed social interaction. Do you agree or disagree?

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Electronics
devices
,
such
 as
smartphones
 have become ubiquitous these days, and
people
 are so engaged with these gadgets. It is often argued that
such
devices
 have destroyed social interactions. I am largely in disagreement with the above notion and we shall discuss a few points in the following essay.
Firstly
,
smartphones
 drastically changed the
way
 of interaction with everyone.
People
 do not need to send handwritten letters to their friends and family and can talk on facetime with their loved ones at any location.
Moreover
, individuals can easily find their old friends and relatives on social
media
such
 as Facebook, Instagram, and other social
media
 applications. To cite an example, in the
last
 few months; when the government of all countries declared lockdown around the world, social
media
 was an enormous help for
people
 to stay connected.
Therefore
,
smartphones
 are an easy
way
 to connect with
people
.
Secondly
, digital
devices
 widely changed their
way
 of learning. To illustrate it more, there are numerous channels on the world wide web and other learning platforms; which support mobile programming. These platforms help individuals to gain more knowledge all the time. Applications like Telegram and Youtube have significantly enhanced the
way
 of learning.
For example
, 5 min craft (DIY channel on youtube and social
media
) that provides ideas to create decorative things with recycling old stuff.
Furthermore
, these kinds of apps are easily available on Playstore;
Hence
,
people
 can gain knowledge through these apps by using their
smartphones
. To conclude, as compared to the
last
 three decades, social interaction has changed dramatically, and digital
devices
 play a significant role to keep connected;
also
, it helps
people
 to stay up to date.
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