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Human activity has had a negative impacts on plants and animals.Some people think that this cannot be changed while others believe actions can be taken to bring a change. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#activity #impacts #plants #animals #people #actions #change
Some people argue that individual
activities
 would have detrimental effects on fauna and animals while others say that nothing can be done about it. While these
activities
 can
generates
Change the verb form
generate

The verb generates after the modal verb can does not appear to be in the correct form. Consider changing the verb form.

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 income for them, I believe that the government should authorize restriction laws that
forces
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force

The verb forces does not seem to agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.

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 them to conform. On one hand, several individuals cut down trees from the forest to enable them
generate
Add the particle
to generate

It appears that the verb generate should be in the to-infinitive form. Consider adding the word to.

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 income for
them
Correct pronoun usage
themselves

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 and their families.
This
 is because so many people are unemployed so
this
 has created a form of work for them to be able to provide their basic amenities.
For instance
,in recent times lots of young adults who just graduated from
the
Correct article usage
apply

It seems that article use may be incorrect here.

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higher institution are without jobs.
As a result
 of
this
Add a comma
,this

It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase As a result of this. Consider adding a comma.

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 they have opted to start selling woods from trees in the local markets to make a living.
This
in
Correct your spelling
is

The word in doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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 no doubt has improved their standard of leaving which would not be possible if the act of pulling down trees were abolished.
On the other hand
,there
are
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is

The plural form of be are does not seem to agree with the singular subject number. Consider changing the verb form.

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number
Change the article
a number
the number

It appears that the phrase number does not contain the correct article usage. Consider making a change.

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 of measures that can be taken to ensure that human
activities
does
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do

The singular verb does does not appear to agree with the plural subject human activities. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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 not cause a drawback effect.
Firstly
 individuals should be prohibited by the laws implemented by the government.
This
 would cause anyone who
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fails

The plural verb fail does not appear to agree with the singular subject anyone. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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fail
Add the particle
tofail

It appears that the verb abide should be in the to-infinitive form. Consider adding the word to.

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 abide by the law
Fix the infinitive
to pay

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pay
Change the verb form
pays

It appears that the indefinite pronoun anyone does not agree with the verb pay in your sentence. Consider changing the form of the verb.

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 a fine.
In addition
,awareness should be created for the public through the media
such
 as posters,television programmed and text messages sent to their mobile phones.
However
,making them informed about the dangers of the
activities
 carried out by them and the associated effect it would have on
livestock’s
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livestocks
livestock

It appears that the noun livestock’s should not be in the possessive form. Consider changing it to the non-possessive singular or plural form.

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 and plants. In conclusion,
although
 people are of the view that no amount of measures established can result in the abolishment of people’s involvements
on
Change preposition
in

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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 crop and animal creatures.I believe that the authorization of rules and regulations by the government can make a huge difference.
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