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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything online without paying. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that the
use
 of printed informative sources ,
such
 as
,
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 newspapers and books will become extinct due to the availability of all the
information
 online for free. I personally agree with the opinion that
people
 will
buyless
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buy less
 printed books or newspapers in future,
however
, the traditional method of printed papers would not escape.
Also
, everything available online would not be for free.
To begin
 with,
although
, I believe that the
use
 of printed papers would decline because the online services these days are considered far more secure and fast
that
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than
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 the traditional ways. The
information
that is
 stored online cannot be easily accessible by others, only the person with the exact password can have access to it. To prove, many government organisations and banks these days are encouraging
people
towars
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towards
toward
 going paperless.
Inspite
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In spite
 of
this
 secure system, many
people
 from developing and undeveloped countries may not have access to it. As the financial
conition
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condition
 of these countries may not allow the government to spend money to create the vast internet network. So, they would
use
 printed papers to keep their
information
.
This
 online
information
 may not be free and
people
 would have to pay some charges for the service. As staff is needed to maintain and update the online resources. If there would
beno
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be no
 revenue in
this
 job
then
 nobody work
come
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 forward to work in
this
 sector.
Hence
, some of the
information
present
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 online would be charged. To conclude, I believe that the
use
 of printed newspapers and books would decline in the near future buy it would be still in
use
 by some.
Also
, some
information
 available online would not be for free.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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