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Some people say that you can learn more about another country by watching television programmes and films about it than by actually visiting it. How true is this statement? Is there anything you can learn about another country by visiting it that cannot learn by watching programmes and films about it? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience.

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it argued
television
 audience can gain more knowledge of a
country
 rather than people who actually visit it. While I agree with
this
 statement, I
also
 believe that physical excursions can
offer
travelers
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 experiences and understandings of a nation beyond
television
 content’s ability. On the one hand, it is true that
television
 programs can
offer
audience
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the audience
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 a wide range of information on a
country
 that a trip cannot
otherwise
. It is because
such
 programs are professionally written with the purpose of introducing,
for example
, a political situation of a
country
.
As a result
, it is clear that a visitor cannot obtain
such
 type of information from travelling alone.
On the other hand
, it is undeniable that physical visits have the ability to significantly deepen a person’s knowledge of a nation, one that
television
 consumption cannot. A major factor to consider is that physical visits
offer
learning
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 through real-life experiences. Only when immersing oneself in local cultures, can visitors and
travelers
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travellers
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 gain a deeper understanding of a
country
’s traditions and customs
.
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For instance
, some foreigners still hold onto the belief that Vietnam is heavily affected by the devastating effects of war, despite the fact that it ended more than 50 years ago.
This
 can partly be explained by the continuous association between Vietnam and war made by the media.
However
, after
traveling
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 to
this
 Vietnam, visitors are bound to realize that it is, in fact, a peaceful
country
 with a promising future ahead. To conclude, my assertion is that while
television
 programs can provide people with an abundance of information on a
country
,
traveling
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 to the
country
 itself can
also
offer
 real-life experiences that should not be overlooked.
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