The high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising but not the real need of the society where such products are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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graveyards shifts to lead ameliorated and exotic lifestyles, under which they find it arduous extract
time
for that advertising the best source of promoting the products in the market but certain masses are thinking if the goods are sold
then
do not need any
promotion
. I
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paragraphs. Admittedly, with the help of social media
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get
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enormous knowledge about the market,
sales
and new goods which are very beneficial for
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society. Nowadays, merging the
sales
really put
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the effect

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on the
advertisment
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advertisement

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because most of the individuals follow the web sources blindly.
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,
meggie
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is the most famous product of all over the world
then
it fully sold out
consumer
never stopped its
promotion
in
market
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.
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, In modern
time
, quality is more prominent than quantity. The outstanding quality of
things
influence the
constumer
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consumer

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to buy it rather if the quality has cheap
advertisment
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advertisement

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is not working that
time
.
Forklore
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Folklore

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believes
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less
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the less

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expensive or best material.
For
example
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if famous
celebrate
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promote the products
then
they
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followers follow
that
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things
for sure.
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influence the
sales
of
consumer
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the consumer

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.
Thus
,
consumer
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the consumer

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never
stop
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the
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promoting
things
if they stop
then
forklore
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forget that
things
and buy new ones which are put
impact
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an impact
the impact

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on the
sales
of
consumer
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the consumer
a consumer

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so
salemen
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salesmen

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always full their storage and never take
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to
stopping
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the
promotion
.
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conclusion, none of us
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time
to wait for anything so never stop the promoting the goods because it put
worse
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a worse
the worse

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effect on the
sales
.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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