The high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising but not the real need of the society where such products are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the competitive era, people are
enagaged
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engaged
graveyards shifts to lead ameliorated and exotic lifestyles, under which they find it arduous extract
time
for that advertising the best source of promoting the products in the market but certain masses are thinking if the goods are sold
then
do not need any
promotion
. I
am disagree
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with
this
notion. I will explain my view pints in the
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posterior
paragraphs. Admittedly, with the help of social media
forklore
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folklore
get
the
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enormous knowledge about the market,
sales
and new goods which are very beneficial for
the
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society. Nowadays, merging the
sales
really put
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an effect
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on the
advertisment
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advertisement
because most of the individuals follow the web sources blindly.
For example
,
meggie
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is the most famous product of all over the world
then
it fully sold out
consumer
never stopped its
promotion
in
market
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the market
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.
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Furthermore
, In modern
time
, quality is more prominent than quantity. The outstanding quality of
things
influence the
constumer
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consumer
to buy it rather if the quality has cheap
advertisment
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advertisement
is not working that
time
.
Forklore
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Folklore
believes
on
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less
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the less
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expensive or best material.
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example
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if famous
celebrate
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promote the products
then
they
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followers follow
that
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things
for sure.
Promotion
influence the
sales
of
consumer
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the consumer
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.
Thus
,
consumer
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the consumer
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never
stop
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the
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promoting
things
if they stop
then
forklore
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folklore
forget that
things
and buy new ones which are put
impact
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an impact
the impact
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on the
sales
of
consumer
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the consumer
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so
salemen
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salesmen
always full their storage and never take
risk
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the risk
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to
stopping
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the
promotion
.
To
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conclusion, none of us
have
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time
to wait for anything so never stop the promoting the goods because it put
worse
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a worse
the worse
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effect on the
sales
.
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