Some schools have restricted the use of mobile phones. Is this a positive development or a negative one?

Nowadays,
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cellular

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phone is
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considered

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to be an essential part of our life.
Although
, its
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necessity

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in pupil’s life and communication some schools have decided to restrict the use of it. In my personal view, it has a positive effect in terms of education quality and sociability of schoolers which
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be given in
this
essay. Restricting phone use in the
students
’ term time can make their concentration stronger on their study.
This
is simply because
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there are far fewer distractions for both teachers and
students
.
For instance
, when a student is learning and trying to understand what he studies a phone message goes off and he attends it.
This
is not just only a notification, but
also
is missing up
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quality of input which can have long-term effects on academic progress.
Therefore
, a blanket ban on phones during
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can save
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time from compulsive checking and make learners focus on
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.
In addition
,
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of using phones in class can encourage the
students
communicate
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with other classmates. It could be explained by the fact that pupils not using any devices may easily get on well with their
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friends

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For example
, in my childhood there was no
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devices or mobiles among my classmates and that we could communicate
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friendly
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and easily
to
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each other.
Furthermore
,
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sociability
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among different
students
may ensure improving their team-building skills.
As a result
, it leads to adopting to society of
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behaviour.
Thus
,
this
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to avoid
students
to be unsociable which can negatively
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effect
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on
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personal skills in the future. In
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conclusion

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, despite
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global
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of mobile phones in our modern life, I strongly believe that their use in schools should be banned.
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, there are apparent merits of
this
because
students
can learn with paying 100% attention and
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forge
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frendships
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friendships

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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