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Some schools have restricted the use of mobile phones. Is this a positive development or a negative one?

Nowadays,
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cellular
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 there are far fewer distractions for both teachers and
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, when a student is learning and trying to understand what he studies a phone message goes off and he attends it.
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quality of input which can have long-term effects on academic progress.
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, a blanket ban on phones during
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 can save
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 of using phones in class can encourage the
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 with other classmates. It could be explained by the fact that pupils not using any devices may easily get on well with their
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friends
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, in my childhood there was no
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devices or mobiles among my classmates and that we could communicate
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sociability
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learners
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personal skills in the future. In
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 of mobile phones in our modern life, I strongly believe that their use in schools should be banned.
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friendships
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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