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Most young people leave school with a negative attitude toward learning. Why do you think this is happening? What can be done to encourage them to have a positive attitude?

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 the education level of the young generation is higher than before, most of them hold a negative attitude towards study
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 after graduation. Some possible reasons
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 issue will be analyzed and suggested in
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 essay. There are three main reasons for
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 case, the essential one of which is that teachers and parents have distorted recognition of formal education. In their views, the object of acquiring academic knowledge, participating in community activities or competition is for achieving better grades that are prerequisites when
appplying
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applying
 for the prestigious university or decent
job
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 positions. Unfortunately, the result is often contrary to their expectations. There seems no indispensable relation between higher salary and diploma; the admission of
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 university and a good GPA, which has been proved by the examples of senior
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 who are still struggling with
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competitors
competition
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 market or undertaking a
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 with
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 payment. The
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 reason lies in the examination-oriented assessment system. Tests are widely used as the sole way to evaluate the learning process, which enormously demotivates
students
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 who are not
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 testing.
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 but not least, some
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 are forced to choose subjects that less interest them. In order to increase the possibility of attaining a stable
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, they may
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major
 in engineering or medicine though art or
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 is their sincere pursuit. There are several
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practices
practise
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 and actions
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 be applied to reverse the negative attitude to learning.
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 of all, the development of personal
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 ability should be emphasized. Apart from scores of exams,
students
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' aesthetic appreciation, athletic ability and moral integrity are supposed to be
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 items of assessment.
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, it is
neccessary
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necessary
 for
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government
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 to promote the diversity of industries. Public funding or tax revenues can be allocated to support the artistic programs or archaeology which may have less
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 with economic growth but are ideals for certain
students
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. In conclusion, it is one's attitude that determines her success. Only when
students
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 have enthusiasm about learning can they benefit from the knowledge they accumulated and
skills
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the skills
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 they mastered.
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