Most young people leave school with a negative attitude toward learning. Why do you think this is happening? What can be done to encourage them to have a positive attitude?

Although
the education level of the young generation is higher than before, most of them hold a negative attitude towards study
especially
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after graduation. Some possible reasons
as well as potential methods to tackle
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, as well as potential methods to tackle this issue,

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this
issue will be analyzed and suggested in
this
essay. There are three main reasons for
this
case, the essential one of which is that teachers and parents have distorted recognition of formal education. In their views, the object of acquiring academic knowledge, participating in community activities or competition is for achieving better grades that are prerequisites when
appplying
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applying

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for the prestigious university or decent
job
positions. Unfortunately, the result is often contrary to their expectations. There seems no indispensable relation between higher salary and diploma; the admission of
first-tier
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university and a good GPA, which has been proved by the examples of senior
students
who are still struggling with
competitiors
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competitors
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in the
job
market or undertaking a
job
with
lower
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payment. The
second
reason lies in the examination-oriented assessment system. Tests are widely used as the sole way to evaluate the learning process, which enormously demotivates
students
who are not
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adept

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at
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testing.
Last
but not least, some
students
are forced to choose subjects that less interest them. In order to increase the possibility of attaining a stable
job
, they may
mojor
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major

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in engineering or medicine though art or
literary
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is their sincere pursuit. There are several
pratices
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practices
practise
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and actions
can
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be applied to reverse the negative attitude to learning.
First
of all, the development of personal
all-round
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ability should be emphasized. Apart from scores of exams,
students
' aesthetic appreciation, athletic ability and moral integrity are supposed to be
main
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items of assessment.
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, it is
neccessary
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necessary

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for
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government

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goverment
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the goverment

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to promote the diversity of industries. Public funding or tax revenues can be allocated to support the artistic programs or archaeology which may have less
relevant
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with economic growth but are ideals for certain
students
. In conclusion, it is one's attitude that determines her success. Only when
students
have enthusiasm about learning can they benefit from the knowledge they accumulated and
skills
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they mastered.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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