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The movement of people from the villages to the cities for work can cause serious problems in both places. What are the serious problems associated with this? what measures can be taken to solve this problem?

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The Industrialisation of megapolis has led to an increase in the
rate
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 of persons migrating from rural to urban areas in search of greener pastures.
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 has led to serious problems
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 as overpopulation, but there are a number of solutions available to tackle it.
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 essay will discuss the causes of rural-urban migration and profer solutions to it. One negative effect of rural exodus is
overpopulation
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an overpopulation
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 of the urban areas. As more people leave the villages to the municipalities, the proportion of people in the city increases and
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 population explosion occurs. Lagos State
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 as air, land and noise pollution from industrial and human activities,
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 affecting health negatively.
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, there is an increase in
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, as most urban dwellers are unemployed, a lot of them resort to illegal activities
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 as stealing and cybercrime.
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, there are ways of tackling
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 situation.
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, the government can make life better for those in the rural areas through provision of basic amenities like hospitals, schools,
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 water and electricity, and
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 by making sure these are available for all, as it will help curtail the number of persons trying to leave their present locations in search for a better one.
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, jobs should be created for all citizens, because, when everyone is engaged, it will drastically reduce
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rate
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 in the metropolis.
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, individuals can
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 learn a skill for themselves, so they can earn a living without support from the government. In conclusion,
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 problems of overpopulation and increase in crime
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 are common in the city due to rural depopulation, the government can tackle these issues by creating a better environment for
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 citizens to thrive.

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