Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skill

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nowadays most of
students
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are lack
off
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of

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good practical
skills
. Some people
thinks
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that studying
academics
are important, others believe that outside
skills
are necessary. I strongly agree that practical exposure is important rather than theoretical
skills
. Let us discuss
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first
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discussion more time spending on
academics
. In many
countries
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secondary schools syllabus
are
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designed with
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of topics
instead
of practical sessions. To explicate, 8th to
10th grade
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classmates are spending time
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understanding the concepts and writing exams without any outside knowledge.
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, recently Oxford university conducted a survey in the school
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, interestingly 70%
students
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their courses for getting good marks.
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, most of the colleges do not have adequate infrastructure. To elaborate, some countries are giving permissions to start college without inspecting the lab facilities.
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, teachers mainly concentrated on
the
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academics
only
instead
of teaching
practical
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sessions.
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, In 2019 a brilliant student from one of the top university
from
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Singapore showed good academic results, but he failed in
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top company practical interview.
Furthermore
, private school operators are majorly concentrating on
students
ratings and achievements only to attract more public.
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, new teenager’s are not good enough in their creativity due to
lack
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of practical
skills
. To encapsulate,
although
studying theoretical facts are beneficial in terms of improving subject knowledge, it is important to consider that government and school management should take proper action to invest money
on
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the practical equipment’s to enhance
students
carrier growth.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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