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Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is considered by many that the
government
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 should grant funding for supporting
artists
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 namely painters and musicians, whilst others think those
artists
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 should be sponsored by different sources. In
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 essay, I will consider both sides of public opinion and provide my opinion.
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 with, many individuals believe
art
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 is essential for a society in which citizens can enjoy and be inspired by it.
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, it promotes the harmony and creative thinking of people in the nation.
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, it is crucial for the authority to
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grant
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 funding for developing
art
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.
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, being an artist is often considered
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a career
which
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from which
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 you will not be able to make a living
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it. For
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 reason, many individuals would prefer to invest their time to study
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other academic subjects namely mathematics and science to secure their living in the future. There are many amateur
artists
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could
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who could
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 not meet their financial needs by creating
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art works
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artworks
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 or performing music.
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, less and less artwork will be created.
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,
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government
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 should invest resources to support the
art
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 industry.
On the other hand
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, it is noticeable that there are many more pressing social issues
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 to be prioritized by the authority.
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 of subsidising to support luxury item-
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,
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government
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the government
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 should grant funding to alleviate poverty by supporting social services.
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, healthcare, education as well as housing system. Creative
artists
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 should make their own efforts to earn their incomes through other means. To illustrate, they can sell their artworks to
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the public
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 or work with private companies to organize
performance
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a performance
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 in a way they can charge the audiences.
Artists
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 should work hard to develop their careers not depending on the nation’s sponsor. In conclusion, it is obvious that there are many more serious social issues
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 governments should prioritize over supporting
artists
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. In my opinion, the
government
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 should still reserve a certain amount of funding to support
artists
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 and promotes
art
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 in the country.
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