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Advertisements are becoming more and more common in everyday live. Is it a positive or negative development?

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The issue of the growing tendency of advertising in modern life has been raising a lot of debates. Some might say that the advertisement brings a lot of benefit to both businesses and client.
On the other hand
, others insist on the opinion that advertising increases the cost of the advertised commodity. Viewing from my perspectives, I personally think that exhibit has both advantages and disadvantages.
To begin
 with, commercial becomes an inevitable tool for the company.
Firstly
, advertising creates corporate brand value by creating contents and logos.
For example
, the popular Nike’ Just Do It slogan has attracted a lot of purchasers to buy their shoes so that their sales and profits have increased significantly.
Secondly
, the customer could know the information of new-launched brand and have more choices for the demand.
For instance
, Nike’ company has released a variety of products
such
 as shoes for lifestyle or sports to meet the needs of customers and promoting
this
 on the website to help customers get clear details of the product.
Finally
, advertising generates many job opportunities
such
 as content creator, a designer so that it reduces the unemployment rate in the world.
On the contrary
, other people think that the cost of commercial activities is expensive so that customer has to bear high prices when they buy the advertised brand.
However
, most customer nowadays finds out the information and select the new commodity through advertising. In conclusion, an advertisement is a form of modern business that every company needs and get customers to have the best choices with high qualified merchandise
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