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Your local library is hiring a new staff member, and you are interested in applying for the position. Write a letter to the library manager to apply for the job. •explain why you are interested in working at the library • describe your relevant qualifications and experience •ask about the next steps in the hiring process

Dear Sir or Madam I am writing to express my interest in the librarian position at your local library. Currently, I am a second-year student at the state university which is located in the town
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hear
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 your library. Since the starts Working interests in www academic year December, I am looking for a new employee as a librarian
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align
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 perfectly with my
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previous experience. I have experience
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working
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librarian
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a librarian
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.
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 year I spent 7 months as an archivist assistant
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the Tashkent City State Archive and gained valuable experience. I
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 like books and ancient manuscripts.
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 I believe I possess all the necessary personal qualities for the position. I am hard-working, punctual and reliable. I am enclosing my CV, including full contact details as
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 as my skills which you may find advantageous for the position. I can send references on request. I would be
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grateful
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 person Thank you for considering my application. Best regards, Marten

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coherence cohesion
Ensure the opening and closing of the letter are appropriately addressed. A more specific salutation and a clearer concluding statement would help.
coherence cohesion
Use transitional phrases to connect paragraphs and ideas effectively. This will improve the overall flow of the letter.
task achievement
Revise grammar and punctuation for clarity. For example, ensure correct verb forms and avoid run-on sentences.
task achievement
The letter presents a clear interest in the position and describes relevant experience.
task achievement
The candidate's personal qualities are well-expressed, adding a positive tone to the application.
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