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The money spent by governments on space programmes would be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Governments in some countries spend large amounts of
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 on
space
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 exploration
programmes
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 it is a waste of
money
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, the spending should go to public services. why
space
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programmes
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 should be abandoned. train scientists and other staff involved with
space
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programmes
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. The facilities and
equipment
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 cost a great deal for the government. If
space
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 missions fail completely, the
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 would be wasted because these
programmes
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 do not benefit normal people in our daily lives. it will take. Any technological error can cost astronauts their lives during the launching process. If something goes wrong, a rescue mission may not be even possible as it takes
huge
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 amount of time to reach a destination. the
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 from
space
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programmes
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 should go to vital public services
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train
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 doctors, teachers, police and other public service workers than it is to train astronauts or the scientists and engineers who work on
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 exploration projects. public servants do jobs that have a positive impact on every member of society. we all use schools, hospitals and roads, and we all need the security that the police provide. If governments reallocated the
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 spent on
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 travel and research, many thousands of people could be given a better quality of life. governments should spend
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 on services that benefit all members of society, waste resources on projects that do not improve our everyday lives.
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