Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place.What is your opinion about this?

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believes that

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your office and house to be kept neat, clean and well

discipline

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manner is the main focus of our

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task in a day. I do agree with the written statement as it

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a vital role in our life in order to achieve something better.

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, as per

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some research it proved that tidy environment will boost your speed towards your

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office

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and home, in a result we can complete our task efficiently and without delaying.

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messy

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workplace usually takes time to search

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work related

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documents or any important item from our personal room or house. We have experienced kind of problems in our life.

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well organised

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place always save our time which can enhance our time management skill and it

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helps us to build up our CV.

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of times that, unorganised workplace affect us

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mentally

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draw your major attention to search

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crucial uncompleted paper works which should be accomplished on

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of my personal experience which based on my previous company where

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I found that one of a

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mostly run his business hours without cleaning his desk and majorly involve in searching for important official papers.

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found him tired and disturbed.

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, to conclude that it is a worth to have in

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well organised

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manner which

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a new joy, energy to

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and inspiration to others to

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properly and organising.

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it is

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good sign of discipline for office employee and house member.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

organised
clutter-free
productivity
mental clarity
efficiency
professionalism
first impressions
ergonomics
aesthetically pleasing
compulsive neatness
functional space
minimising distractions
systematic arrangement
time management
work-life balance
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