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Some people say Technology is important. To what extent do you agree?

#people #technology
The world has advanced quite a lot in technologies.
Everyday
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 newer and newer technologies are coming into
market
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the market
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 causing existing on
obselete
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obsolete
.I believe
technology
 is important for
advancement
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the advancement
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 of
world
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the world
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 with application in almost any field.
Firstly
, the invention of various gadgets has improvised operations in most of the fields, conducting most of the complex procedures involving risk and time, thereby improving the quality of
work
.
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 the automation in
contructions
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construction
constructions
 and production has changed the way of working. the
Current
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 rate of production in a plant can be estimated to twice or thrice compared to plant production twenty years ago.
Secondly
, technological
advancement
 in
medical
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 sector has greatly
benifitted
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benefitted
benefited
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mankind to a very great extent. Diagnosis of most of the disease has become possible even at a very early stage.
User friendly
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health
 devices are helping people keep a check on
health
.
For example
, the
smart watch
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 invention has made it
userfriendly
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 to measure heartbeat,BP and even the level of oxygen in blood in just some clicks.
Finally
,
Technology
 has largely transformed the way of working in most of the fields.The
convenice
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convenience
 and the security working anywhere is possible without any problems.
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 the covid-19 has forced most
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the
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people to
work
 from home.It was the
advance
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technology
which
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 made it possible to
work
 without compromising the quality and quantity of
work
.
Neverthless
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Nevertheless
,
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 of
technololgy
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technology
 has created a very big issue among the masses which was not present earlier,
Health
 complication. Most of
work
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are
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 sitting in front of the laptop which has caused
this
 problem, Nowdays even children are getting addicted to mobiles and gaming
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effecting
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affecting
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 their
health
 and even their mentality.
Conversly
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Conversely
these situation
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 can be avoided by keeping
a
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strict control over
usage
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 of technical gadget and balance life with some outdoor activities. To conclude,
technology
 is a part of life and will be in future but a balance and control in usage will lead to a life with comfort and
advancement
 in all aspects.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • online marketplaces
  • mobile payment options
  • personalized advertising
  • accessibility
  • compare prices
  • decision fatigue
  • impulse buying
  • financial imprudence
  • privacy and data security
  • transformed
  • streamlined
  • user-friendly
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