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Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

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Humans damage the environment in various ways like throw garbage on the streets, pollute the sea by throwing plastics or by cutting trees to expand their habitat.
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 can lead to a slow but permanent impact on our planet, thereby creating a problem for our future.
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 to curb
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 vigorous situation,
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save our nature. Various
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 body corporates are doing their best to create a positive impact and save our planet. They spread awareness by creating meaningful advertisements and publishing on social sites. One example is where the government has adopted
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 odd-even car system to deal with air and noise pollution. Another example would be governments encouraging
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 to segregate wet and dry waste so that some materials can be recycled.
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, various countries are investing in renewable sources of energy which is proved to be beneficial in the long run. We as individuals can
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 participate and make a difference in our own way to save our earth.
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, we can make use of public transport or walk when required rather than using our own vehicles.
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, we can avoid cutting trees or plant more trees in our backyard or in a garden. We can
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 reuse our old products or recycle them if it is not required. Saving water can be valuable as
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 consume and
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 by using the dishwasher, filling the swimming pool or leaving their taps on.
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, we can educate
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 by creating awareness and children by teaching them valuable lessons in schools about conserving our resources. In conclusion,
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 before about these impacts and do their bit to help protect the environment. I certainly think that
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pollution: contamination, emissions, pollutants, industrial waste
  • Deforestation: habitat loss, biodiversity, urban development, logging
  • Climate Change: greenhouse gases, global warming, fossil fuels, renewable energy
  • Overfishing: unsustainable, fish stocks, marine ecosystems, conservation
  • Waste Production: non-biodegradable, plastics, recycling, waste management systems
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