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Some people say that e-books and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines to what extent do you agree or disagree.

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The latest technological advancement and digital books may take over the conventional newspapers and magazines. In my opinion, I strongly disagree
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 view because the poor network connections and lack of technical expertise of the public would minimise the chance to happen
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in the foreseeable future.
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, the availability of network connections to the entire world is minimal.
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, to read newspapers and watch television,
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fast and efficient connectivity is extremely necessary;
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,
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 parts of the world still the availability is impossible.
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, even though India is a massive hub of internet users, most of them have been encountering the issue of poor network signals during their usage. Due to
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, their usage limited to listening to radios or checking their social
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 updates rather than reading online news and other magazines.
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, a majority of the population lacks
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 skills
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necessary to have in order to use electronic
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 in their day to day life. Many news channels and publications have their own applications to generate their content that may be complicated to use for
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 since they are poorly equipped with
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 nuances of the digital platform.Eventually, the users hesitate to incorporate
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complicated digital
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 their daily life and rarely going to happen anytime in the near future. The complexity can be usually seen while using newspapers apps of
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paper based
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 magazines and
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 as the Hindu and BBC. In conclusion,
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 it has been noticed that overall the internet customers
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 been increased hugely, I hardly think that it would replace the traditional way of
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 reading or magazine subscription.
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 is because of the slow networks and insufficient technical skills to use these highly complicated applications.
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