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You recently received a letter from a friend asking for your advise on whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter say why she will not enjoy going to college explain why getting a job is a good idea Suggest the type of job that would be suitable

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Dear Freddy Fazbear, I hope you're doing well. Your question about picking
college
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a college
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 or a
job
 got me thinking. Honestly, I think a
job
 might be a good idea for you right now. College can be tough, dealing with money problems, high tuition fees, and trying to keep up with the ever-changing
job
 market and fast tech changes. It's definitely a challenging and sometimes overwhelming journey.
On the other hand
, getting a
job
 right away has its good points. You dive into the work world, learn by doing, and can start earning money independently. Considering your skills, I'd say checking out restaurant jobs, like being a waiter, could be a good fit. It pays well and helps you improve how you interact with people and plan things. Choosing a career early can be really good and satisfying. Think about what matches your goals and dreams. Don't be afraid to jump into the working world. Best of luck figuring things out! Best, JoXa
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Task Achievement
While you provided clear arguments and reasons, further expansion on these ideas with more examples or personal experiences could strengthen your response.
Coherence & Cohesion
Consider using linking words or phrases to enhance the flow between sentences and paragraphs. This can make your argument more cohesive and easier for the reader to follow.
Coherence & Cohesion
Introduce varying sentence structures to keep the reader engaged. This will also demonstrate a more versatile command of the language.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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