Some people think that when a person travels into a different culture they should adapt to the local practices and customs. To what extent do you agree ?

It is commonly seen that most
of
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the
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people love to travel and perform various recreational
activties
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activities

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by visiting various parts of the world.It is
also
noticable
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that
variety
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of places have various cultural
values
and rituals.Many individuals believe that travellers should follow
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these

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theses
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values
and rituals whereas some argue that they should
focuses
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on enjoying their trips
instead
of paying attention
towards
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following the local
community
beliefs.I partially agree with
this
statement. To commence with, I think there are many pros of adapting to
culture
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the culture

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and customs of local natives.
Firstly
, it will help to improve the interpersonal relationship between the passengers and the residents of that areas.If tourist
are
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trying to learn the
culture
of
place
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they are
visting
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then
, they can interact better with the locals of that areas. Dwellers of
community
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the community

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will
also
show
respect
and appreciation towards their skills and willingness to learn and
as a
result
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this
will elevate
respect
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of visitors in the eyes of people living in that particular areas.
Secondly
,
this
will bring a feeling of belongingness and help them to
adadpt
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adapt
adopt

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better to the place .It will
also
make the journey easy and adaptable by bringing more pleasure.
For instance
, I had a trip to
different
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a different

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province in India and they had
different
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a different

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language, religion and
culture
.I tried to communicate in their local language and visited various religious places.These small efforts helped me to gain more knowledge and I collected very different experience with lots of mesmerising memories.Locals
also
appreciated that I am trying to adapt and showed welcoming behaviour. On the
otherhand
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, there are some
negavtive
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negative

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aspects of following the other
cutlure
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culture

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and practice because passenger
face
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various difficulties.Humans love to travel to other parts of
world
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to reduce stress.Sometimes they choose to visit places which are completely new and unknown
for
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them.So it becomes difficult for them to adapt to the
culture
and language .If they are insisted to learn forcefully or by strict
community
guidelines
then
,
this
will become mentally exhausting for them. Unfortunately, they will not even give a thought of
visting
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that place again.
This
will
also
have a major impact on
economy
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the economy

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of
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country

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conutry
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the conutry

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.
Moreover
,every person
have
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their own personality.They behave, talk and adapt according to their needs and personality.It would be considered wrong and violating to follow
certains
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certain

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priniciples
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of behaving
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communicating.In
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,
may
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commuters think that they
donot
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have enough knowledge and experience so, they avoid taking risk of experimenting new
culture
.
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They are
also
afraid of doing some mistakes that can eventually have
negative
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a negative

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influence on the local people as well as degrade the image of
vistiors
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visitors

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. To conclude, it is seen that as it is vital to
respect
the
culture
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values
of
local
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community
but it is
also
equally important to
respect
the
values
, feelings and
epxerience
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experience
experiences

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of
indivial
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individual
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as well.So, everyone should be given right according to their needs and follow whatever they want to make their trip enjoyable.
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