Some people think that when a person travels into a different culture they should adapt to the local practices and customs. To what extent do you agree ?

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It is commonly seen that most
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people love to travel and perform various recreational
activties
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activities
by visiting various parts of the world.It is
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noticable
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noticeable
that
variety
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of places have various cultural
values
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and rituals.Many individuals believe that travellers should follow
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these
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theses
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these
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values
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and rituals whereas some argue that they should
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on enjoying their trips
instead
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of paying attention
towards
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following the local
community
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beliefs.I partially agree with
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statement. To commence with, I think there are many pros of adapting to
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culture
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the culture
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and customs of local natives.
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, it will help to improve the interpersonal relationship between the passengers and the residents of that areas.If tourist
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trying to learn the
culture
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of
place
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they are
visting
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visiting
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, they can interact better with the locals of that areas. Dwellers of
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community
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will
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show
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and appreciation towards their skills and willingness to learn and
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this
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will elevate
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respect
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of visitors in the eyes of people living in that particular areas.
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,
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will bring a feeling of belongingness and help them to
adadpt
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adapt
adopt
better to the place .It will
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make the journey easy and adaptable by bringing more pleasure.
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, I had a trip to
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province in India and they had
different
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language, religion and
culture
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.I tried to communicate in their local language and visited various religious places.These small efforts helped me to gain more knowledge and I collected very different experience with lots of mesmerising memories.Locals
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appreciated that I am trying to adapt and showed welcoming behaviour. On the
otherhand
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other hand
, there are some
negavtive
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negative
aspects of following the other
cutlure
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culture
and practice because passenger
face
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various difficulties.Humans love to travel to other parts of
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to reduce stress.Sometimes they choose to visit places which are completely new and unknown
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them.So it becomes difficult for them to adapt to the
culture
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and language .If they are insisted to learn forcefully or by strict
community
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guidelines
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,
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will become mentally exhausting for them. Unfortunately, they will not even give a thought of
visting
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visiting
that place again.
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will
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have a major impact on
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of
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country
conutry
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.
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,every person
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their own personality.They behave, talk and adapt according to their needs and personality.It would be considered wrong and violating to follow
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certain
priniciples
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principles
of behaving
adn
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and
communicating.In
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addition
,
may
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commuters think that they
donot
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do not
don't
have enough knowledge and experience so, they avoid taking risk of experimenting new
culture
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.
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They are
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afraid of doing some mistakes that can eventually have
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influence on the local people as well as degrade the image of
vistiors
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visitors
. To conclude, it is seen that as it is vital to
respect
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the
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culture
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values
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of
local
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the local
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community
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but it is
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equally important to
respect
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the
values
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, feelings and
epxerience
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experience
experiences
of
indivial
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individual
individuals
as well.So, everyone should be given right according to their needs and follow whatever they want to make their trip enjoyable.
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