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Do you agree that the advantages cars bring outweigh the disadvantages?

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Using transportation has been becoming increasingly common in recent years.
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 I think that it maintains some obvious harmful consequences, I strongly believe that the advantages of the automobile can outweigh its advantages. On the one hand, owning cars has a significant influence on the environment. The
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 reason is that the growth in travelling by wagon can lead to a rise in pollution, traffic jams, and accidents. More automobile is likely to result in a rocketing rate of pollution.
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, our dependence on the vehicle can lead to a decrease in practices,
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 as walking and cycling. People may have a higher chance of carrying more potential health risks like obesity and heart attack.
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, there are many reasons why people prefer to own an auto.
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, it provides people with the freedom of movement. The ease of transportation that a wagon brings is significant/prominent than any other form of vehicles.
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, you can go from a destination to another destination and no time is wasted waiting for the bus or train.
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, time and distance are not barriers anymore.
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, a personal vehicle can give comfort while travelling compared to public transports which are so crowded and disgusting.
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, you can read books, listen to your favourite songs or even play with kids while you are in your own auto but all seems to be impossible on public transport.
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, families can go together.
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 becomes especially helpful when there are elderly, the disabled or even sick members in the families. In conclusion, having a bus can lead to a few obvious problems, but I believe that owning an auto is the best choice and the benefits that it brings about can outshine its drawbacks
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