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Some people say that giving a smaller amount of money weekly to children will help them become more capable as they grow older. Do you agree or disagree?

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Financial maturity among
children
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 is an interesting topic that often brings up mixed opinions.
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 there are many
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 who agree
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 providing a small amount of
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 to
children
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 every week, the other half of parents are against the idea of offering
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 to
children
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 at the early stages of their life.
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 essay agrees with the former and will discuss both points of view. On the one hand, exposing
children
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 to take monetary decisions will definitely promote healthy spending habits in them. At the same time, it is
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 absolutely essential for parents to enquire about their
children
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 on how they spend
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 which was given to them. If the child bought something which was not supposed to be a sensible choice, parents should explain
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to them
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why it was a wrong choice. It is
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 necessary to take feedback from the
children
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 on their reasoning behind the purchase. Consistent feedback on their financial decisions will necessitate them to think extensively before making any purchases in the future.
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, some
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 often say that
children
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 could end up consuming illegal substances like drugs if they have
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 in hand.
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 is entirely a wrong perception as most of the illegal habits are often inherited from the bad company of their friends. So
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 of denying them
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, an ideal choice would be to closely monitor the friend's circle of the child and ensure that they are not circled by suspicious
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. To recapitulate, spending
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 in the right manner is an art and many
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, in spite of being matured are still finding it difficult to attain financial maturity. In order to achieve
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financial maturity, it is essential that the
children
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 are given a role in making correct financial decisions at childhood itself.Remember, seeds imparted at the early stages
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 the financial characteristics of a child rather than being a spendthrift in the future. Votes

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial responsibility
  • independence
  • financial literacy
  • work ethic
  • effort and reward
  • impulsive purchases
  • budgeting skills
  • critical thinking
  • sense of entitlement
  • modest amounts
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