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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#governments #money #railways #roads
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In
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 day and age, more and more contemporary attention has been placed on the opinion that authorities ought to allocate
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 for
railways
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 rather than
roads
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. In my point of view, I do not subscribe to the idea for the following reasons.
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, making a huge investment in
railways
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 is unnecessary, especially in developing nations since
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 will place a great burden on the domestic economy. To be more specific, the possibility of making profits in
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 kind of transportation is not high. With the low amount of
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 from selling tickets, the authority cannot use that one in order to pay maintenance fees as well as other extra ones like paying salary for employees. In
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 case, governments are compelled to use
money
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 in their fiscal budget in order to maintain the good infrastructure of
railways
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.
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, from my knowledge, spending
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 on
roads
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 will help tackle traffic congestion, which is one of the most burning problems in many countries.
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 is due to the fact that in today’s world, more and more citizens have a tendency to use their private cars to commute or travel, and as an inevitable consequence,
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 causes traffic tram. In order to deal with
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 issue, the authority has to allocate
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 for expanding the distance of
roads
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 as well as improving the road quality to meet the increasing number of personal cars.
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, if the government pour more
money
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 into
railways
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, they will not have enough budget for these improvements, especially in less-advanced nations. In conclusion, with the reasons mentioned above, I strongly believe that the government should spend more
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 on
roads
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 than
railways
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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