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Write a letter to your manager complaining about parking situation at work. In your letter, you should: describe the problems are explain why should solve the problems suggest how to solve the problems.

#manager #situation #work
Dear Mr. Smith, I am writing
this
 letter to complain about the parking issue that our staff facing on
daily
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 basis and to suggest a solution to fix them. Our employees
parking
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park
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 their vehicles inside the company campus, but many
parkings
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parking
 are occupied by the visitors of different companies that
accomodate
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accommodate
 inside
this
 campus. Because of
this
 our staff unable to park.
Moreover
,
this
 creates huge traffic jams near our main
enterance
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entrance
. Eventually,
this
 causes a huge delay in scanning identity
card
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cards
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 at the entry, and there is a delay caused
everyday
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every day
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 to reach the workstations so our workers are
in
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under
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 immense stress. There are some employees
were
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who were
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also
 penalised for
late
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being late
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due to
this
 issue. I would recommend you to create a dedicated parking for our office staff, which will allow us to park vehicles without
confusions
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. If we resolve
this
 problem, we will save a lot of time in the
mornings
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morning
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 hours and can highly reduce traffic jams
in
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at
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 the main
enterance
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entrance
 as well. Yours sincerely, James Wilson
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Coherence & Cohesion
Try to vary your sentence structure and vocabulary to enhance readability.
General
Ensure to proofread your letter for minor typographical errors to maintain professionalism.
Task Achievement
You've effectively described the parking problems at your workplace.
Task Achievement
Your suggestion for solving the problems is clear and practical.
Coherence & Cohesion
The logical sequence of your arguments enhances the letter's impact.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • parking conflicts
  • insufficient parking
  • limited parking spaces
  • tardiness
  • security concerns
  • vehicle safety
  • workplace morale
  • employee satisfaction
  • rotating parking schedule
  • feasible solutions
  • remote parking location
  • carpool system
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