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Tourism has emerged as one of the biggest industries of this decade, but its disadvantages cannot be overlooked. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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There is no doubt that the
tourism
industry
 is booming in so many countries.
Tourism
 includes the leisure activities of
people
 to travelling and staying in outside places from their local area/environment. The
tourism
industry
 is an organization, which arrange these activities for its tourists. The main reason behind the development of the
tourism
 business is the enhancement of technology which helps
people
 to travel the world with great transportation facility. As every coin has two sides, the
tourism
industry
 has
also
 its merits and demerits. On the
first
 side, the
tourism
industry
 plays an important role in raising the economy of the country. It helps the
people
 by providing them with a job opportunity
such
 as a tourist guide of their local area and in the hospitality sector.
Then
, it helps the visitor to know about the historical culture, religion and language of other countries/places. After that, it
also
 creates more demand for local food.
Moreover
, it enhances the value of one’s culture to the entire world.
Furthermore
, it helps to create a better understanding between two or more cultures at the same time.
In addition
 to it, it
also
 improves the living standard of the
tourism
 area. On the flip side, there are some negative impacts on the
tourism
industry
 too.
First
 of all, it destroys the natural beauty of
tourism
 places as a visitor through waste material
such
 as wraps, cans etcetera.
Secondly
, as
tourism
 is a seasonal activity, it leads the temporary jobs only. After
this
, it creates an environmental issue related to air and noise pollution and
also
 effects on transportation systems which in results traffic jams too because of more vehicles on road.
Besides
 that, some visitors make fun of the tradition and local culture, which in results
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conflicts between
people
. Sometimes the tourists face harassment by the reason of some criminal and theft-related activities. To Summarize, according to me
although
 positive factors of the
tourism
industry
 are acceptable as a source of revenue for the country/nation, its negative impacts cannot be ignored by any chance.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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