In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work .Some people feel that this is complete wrong .However others sport this becouse they feel that it provides valuable work expirience .What is your opinion on this.

Children are known as
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nation builder.They are the future of the country.In many ,nations
youngsters
are involved in some types of employment.Some individual believes that
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totaly
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wrong and while others agree with
this
because they think that it gives knowledge and experience about
work
.In
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going to discuss my views. To begins with,engaging adolescent in some kind of paid works has several drawbacks.
Firstly
,the
youngsters
are made to
work
for longer hours at a low wage.
This
will
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the children to do
work
in future.
Secondly
,some times children will start pursuing ill behaviour because of the influence of co-workers.
For example
,while working along with the adult workers some adolescents
also
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drug addict and learn bad habits from them.In the age of hanging out with ,friends they have to
work
along with
thier
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their
studies.
Thus
,
youngsters
also
came under the burden of studies and family responsibilities.
On the other hand
,involving
youngsters
in paid
work
will teach them the value of money and
work
.They become matured enough to spend money wisely.
As a result
,they become financially educated and independent.
Therefore
,they become matured and strong to
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take
the challenges of life. To conclude,in my
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although
employment
provide
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the life
expirence
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experience
and make them mentally matured.
However
, it
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also
put
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on
childrend
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children
children's
life and bad impact on
thier
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their
studies.
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