Some people think that spending a lot on holding wedding parties, birthday parties and other celebrations is just a waste of money. Others, however, think that these are necessary for individuals and the society.

In the modern world, throwing
dinner
can be challenging for its organizers.
However
, there is an opinion that it can create a new society, which is more organized and cheerful. Personally, I reckon that celebrations’ number should be limited in order to make a conscious society. It is widely known that
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crowd spend a significant amount of money on the celebrations of celebration,
such
as weddings, birthdays and graduation.
Consequently
, they can face a shortage of money after the celebrations. A good illustration of
this
is weddings in Central Asia, where citizens take loans and credits in order to celebrate
dinner
.
Furthermore
,
dinner
can lead to an unhealthy lifestyle.
That is
to say, not controlling your diet can lead to the deterioration of well-being. To illustrate, many party animals are suffering from diseases relating to their digestion.
On the other hand
,
such
kinds of events can be beneficial for individuals as well as for society.
First
of all, it can create a new community. It is widely accepted that if individuals spend their time at
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celebration, they can communicate with
other family
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.
As a result
, they can develop their soft skills.
For instance
, the community can get a benefit from these communications, because it can lead to prosperity.
Secondly
, the
dinner
can leave good memories. The important thing is that individuals get various emotions and enjoyment.
For example
, many
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can feel sadness, when they are graduated from universities or schools. To conclude,
although
celebrations of events can bring various emotions and amusement, personally, I believe that their number should be regulated
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because
public
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can waste their money.
In addition
, it can create some minor problems for the health.
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  • extravagant
  • frivolous
  • lavish
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • consumerism
  • unrealistic
  • social bonds
  • milestones
  • local businesses
  • celebrate
  • memorable
  • nostalgic
  • cherish
  • community
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