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Some people believe that the charity organizations should give aid to those greatest need, wherever they live. Other people believe that the charity organizations should concentrate on helping people in own country instead. Discuss both views and give you opinion

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Charities
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 were born from the chaos and wars over the past centuries. Nowadays a plethora of
people
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 believe that
charities
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 should aim at supporting the domestic
people
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 who are suffering,
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, I personally contend that
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 organizations should focus on aiding whoever needs help regardless of where they are.
Charities
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 are usually resourceful and professional in supporting
people
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 globally. In Mideast,
people
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 are struggling in wars, destitution and famine. The local governments have a shortage of staff and budget to support their
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, in
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 case, it is the responsibility of the
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 to help them. In fact, a variety of
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 have powerful support like funding and professional workers which make overseas charitable activities accessible.
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, catastrophes have global impacts,
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 as the nuclear disaster in Chernobyl or Fukushima, the damage to our planet can be minimized with global organizations' support. For those who argue that
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 should mainly concentrate on domestic citizens, one of their strongest argument could be that there are
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 who are suffering from handicaps or diseases living in the neighbourhoods. Admittedly, some rare diseases could be difficult to surmount, and the treatment can be unaffordable for ordinary families.
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 do seem necessary to appear and give their helping hand.
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, the population of these cases are far much smaller than the one all over the planet, sometimes it is
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 for
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 to locate
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 a case. In conclusion, charity organizations should focus on supporting
people
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 globally, even though sometimes
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 in their own countries need help, the number is limited.
Charities
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 can give aid whenever there are cries from domestic rather than focus on searching for them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • charity organizations
  • aid
  • greatest need
  • equality
  • fair distribution
  • resources
  • universal value
  • compassion
  • humanitarianism
  • global stability
  • economic growth
  • local needs
  • national unity
  • quality of life
  • social cohesion
  • inequality
  • domestic communities
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