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Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

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Introduction
Food
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 sustainability is one of the basic human rights but achieving
this
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 should not impact the
environment
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 and economy. Few individuals think utilize
food
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items
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 available in the local habitat is good for the
environment
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 and
it
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support
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the
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financial stability. I agree with
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 view and in the following essay, I will explain why I
support
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 point of view.
Body paragraph 1
Transporting
food
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 products across the world mainly depend on petroleum or
diesel based
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diesel-based
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 vehicles which can cause global warming. Transport and
food
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 delivery may take up to months to reach
its
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their
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 final destination from the production location. During
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 process, tons of fossil fuels will be burned and it emits carbon monoxide and other microparticles, and it causes one of the main reason for global warming. On the other side, if consumers start to utilize locally available products
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 the transport requirements get reduced and eventually, it will help to reduce global warming and increase the stability of the
environment
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.
Body paragraph 2
Food
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 products will be cheaper if it produced in
the
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nearby areas due to various factors. Transportation cost will be less for the
items
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 grown in
neighboring
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neighbouring
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 areas compare to goods shipped from long distance.
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,
food
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 preservation and chemical processing used in
majority
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the majority
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 of the globally shipped goods,
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 crops may spoil quickly, and
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 process will inflate the final value of the product.
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,
movement
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the movement
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 of goods from Japan to
US
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the US
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 will be more costly compared to transporting inside
US
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the US
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Conclusion
There are numerous advantages for homegrown
food
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items
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 especially for
to
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support
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 the
environment
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 as well as it will increase
economical
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the economical
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 stability of consumers and society. Based on the arguments outlined above I strongly
support
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 the benefits of locally grown
food
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items
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 are much better than transported
items
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 from different geographical regions.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon emissions
  • transportation
  • environmentally friendly
  • economically beneficial
  • local farmers
  • local economy
  • fresher
  • nutritious
  • food security
  • imports
  • preserving
  • traditional farming practices
  • biodiversity
  • limited variety
  • availability
  • cost
  • contributor
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