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Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

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Food
 sustainability is one of the basic human rights but achieving
this
 should not impact the
environment
 and economy. Few individuals think utilize
food
items
 available in the local habitat is good for the
environment
 and
it
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apply
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support
the
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financial stability. I agree with
this
 view and in the following essay, I will explain why I
support
this
 point of view. Transporting
food
 products across the world mainly depend on petroleum or
diesel based
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diesel-based
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 vehicles which can cause global warming. Transport and
food
 delivery may take up to months to reach
its
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 final destination from the production location. During
this
 process, tons of fossil fuels will be burned and it emits carbon monoxide and other microparticles, and it causes one of the main reason for global warming. On the other side, if consumers start to utilize locally available products
then
 the transport requirements get reduced and eventually, it will help to reduce global warming and increase the stability of the
environment
.
Food
 products will be cheaper if it produced in
the
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nearby areas due to various factors. Transportation cost will be less for the
items
 grown in
neighboring
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neighbouring
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 areas compare to goods shipped from long distance.
Additionally
,
food
 preservation and chemical processing used in
majority
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the majority
a majority
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 of the globally shipped goods,
otherwise
 crops may spoil quickly, and
this
 process will inflate the final value of the product.
For example
,
movement
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the movement
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 of goods from Japan to
US
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the US
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 will be more costly compared to transporting inside
US
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the US
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. There are numerous advantages for homegrown
food
items
 especially for
to
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supporting
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support
 the
environment
 as well as it will increase
economical
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the economical
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 stability of consumers and society. Based on the arguments outlined above I strongly
support
 the benefits of locally grown
food
items
 are much better than transported
items
 from different geographical regions.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon emissions
  • transportation
  • environmentally friendly
  • economically beneficial
  • local farmers
  • local economy
  • fresher
  • nutritious
  • food security
  • imports
  • preserving
  • traditional farming practices
  • biodiversity
  • limited variety
  • availability
  • cost
  • contributor
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