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Education should be free for everyone. Do you agree or disagree with this statement, and to what extent?

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Education
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 should be one of the most important
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 in one’s life. Many believe that
education
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 should be offered free for everyone. I completely agree with
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 statement.
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 of all,
children
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 play an important role
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 the
future
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. Obviously, the candidates who will rule the
future
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 should be highly educated people. We need to make sure that the
children
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 have access to
education
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 regardless of their background and financial condition. For
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, we have to make
education
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 free for all
children
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 in the world. Some country
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 implemented
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 idea.
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, in Germany, all schools and universities do not require the students to pay any fee.
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, all people in Germany have
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 opportunity to learn and develop themselves.
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contrary
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, if
education
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 does not
offered
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 for free,
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education
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 gap between rich and poor will be widened. Poor
children
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 will not have access to
education
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 despite being highly intelligent.
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, these
children
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 will have limited opportunity to have highly paid job in the
future
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. Only certain people with privilege can get the taste of
education
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.
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, many
children
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 in my country have a high will to study
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 but do not have access to it because they do not have money to get them into a school.
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, they never have any chance to learn in school and the chance for them to have a better life are low because most companies require at least a high school diploma for the employees. In conclusion, it is important that we eliminate any sort of barriers to
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, including costs.
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 is due to the fact that
children
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 have vital roles in our
future
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 world and because paid
education
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 can widen the gap between the rich and the poor.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • lifelong education
  • continual learning
  • adapt
  • changing technologies
  • societal norms
  • cognitive function
  • cognitive decline
  • personal development
  • self-improvement
  • formal education
  • navigate
  • emphasis
  • pressure
  • contentment
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