Education should be free for everyone. Do you agree or disagree with this statement, and to what extent?

Education
should be one of the most important
thing
Change to a plural noun
things

The singular countable noun thing follows the quantifier one of, which requires a plural noun. Consider using a plural noun or a different quantifier.

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in one’s life. Many believe that
education
should be offered free for everyone. I completely agree with
this
statement.
First
of all,
children
play an important role
for
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in

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the
future
. Obviously, the candidates who will rule the
future
should be highly educated people. We need to make sure that the
children
have access to
education
regardless of their background and financial condition. For
this
, we have to make
education
free for all
children
in the world. Some country
have
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has

The plural verb have does not appear to agree with the singular subject Some country. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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implemented
this
idea.
For example
, in Germany, all schools and universities do not require the students to pay any fee.
Thus
, all people in Germany have
same
Correct article usage
the same

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opportunity to learn and develop themselves.
In
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On

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contrary
Correct article usage
the contrary

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, if
education
does not
offered
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offer

It appears that the verb offered is incorrectly used with the helping verb does. Consider changing it to the base form.

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for free,
education
Add an article
the education

The noun phrase education gap seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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gap between rich and poor will be widened. Poor
children
will not have access to
education
despite being highly intelligent.
Consequently
, these
children
will have limited opportunity to have highly paid job in the
future
. Only certain people with privilege can get the taste of
education
.
For example
, many
children
in my country have a high will to study
,
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apply

It appears that you have an unnecessary comma in a compound predicate. Consider removing it.

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but do not have access to it because they do not have money to get them into a school.
As a result
, they never have any chance to learn in school and the chance for them to have a better life are low because most companies require at least a high school diploma for the employees. In conclusion, it is important that we eliminate any sort of barriers to
education
, including costs.
This
is due to the fact that
children
have vital roles in our
future
world and because paid
education
can widen the gap between the rich and the poor.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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