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University students must pay all tuition fees, because it benefits mostly them individually, rather than the society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

#university #students #tuition #fees #society
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The issue of whether learners should be paying
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 of higher
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 is a matter of concern for many. Critics argue that
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 paying can help society in many ways
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 as maintaining the campus, paying teachers, etc,
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 others and I believe the opposite.
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 should pay zero tuition fee by using examples from New Scientist UK magazine and British Medical Journal.
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, most
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 around the world have raised their
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 of
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 that has made higher
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 undesirable for many.
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, a recent study by New Scientist UK magazine, found one-
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 of youngsters do not apply to higher institutes as they can afford to pay the tuition fees. Based on
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 study, it can be deduced that many learners do not want to proceed to
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 due to the high
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 which does not help the public, as there is a risk of shortage of key workers in the country
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 as teachers, doctors who require to be taught at higher levels.
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, if the
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 of
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 kept surging it will only lead to a decline in graduating
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.
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 to the low number of graduates, another reason why
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 should not pay the full
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 of
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 is
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 there is a possible risk of enormous debt-related mental health problems.
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, a study done in 2019 by British Medical Journal found that one-
third
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 of British graduates are inclined to suffer from conditions
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 as depression and anxiety in comparison to Finnish
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. Finland provides free higher learning, and
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students
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 graduating from their schools are less likely to have psychological conditions. So if UK
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 want to lower the risk of mental health conditions in young learners, they should consider using Finland way of teaching. To conclude from the aforementioned examples, I firmly believe,
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 is essential to all,
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 many do not end up going to
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 due to
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cost
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 of learning and being in serious debts.
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