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Littering in cities is an increasing problem which needs to be dealt with. Some people think that steeper fines is the best way to deal with the problem. To what extent do you agree?

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Giving the fact that leaving litter in urban areas has become a contemporary problem, some could argue that the perpetrators should be highly fined for
this
 in order to stop them from doing so. In my opinion, fining those who keep littering is not the solution to
this
 issue, as paying the fine will not make them realize that
this
 is wrong. I will explain
further
 my idea throughout the essay. It is true that steeper fines could be a solution at the start. The fine solution is able to make desist
people
 from committing major crimes,
such
 as stealing or vandalism actions. Some
people
 think that
this
 is why many crimes are avoided because
people
 do not want to lose money if they are caught on doing sometime illegal or against the law.
For example
, after smoking in public places has been prohibited,
people
 kept doing so, as they were not punished. But, when the law put the fine on smoking indoor, suddenly
people
 stopped doing it.
On the other hand
,
this
 kind of punishment is not efficient in the long term.
In other words
, fine
people
 could help to reduce the phenomenon of leaving litter in cities, but it cannot guarantee that
people
 will stop in the future. Apparently,
people
 who are fined do not understand the reason why they are, and for
this
 reason, they are mostly like to repeat the same error over and over. It is a better way to give them the opportunity to understand why they are doing something wrong, so as to teach them a lesson.
This
 is very close to something that happened to me. I passed the red light while I was cycling, and a police person stopped me, but
instead
 of fine me, he enrolled me in an online course that explained why it is wrong to pass when there is a red light. From that moment on I stopped doing it as I realized To conclude, after having explained both viewpoints, I strongly believe that
people
 should no receive a stepper fine for leaving rubbish in metropolitan areas, but it would be more beneficial to help them be conscious of why they are wrong and what they can do. By doing
this
 not only it
people
 will not only be more likely to stop
this
 habit, but
also
 make them realize what is right.
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  • Urban sanitation
  • Deterrence
  • Environmental stewardship
  • Public awareness
  • Civic responsibility
  • Enforcement measures
  • Sanctions
  • Penalties
  • Recycling initiatives
  • Behavioral change
  • Socio-economic impact
  • Cost-effective
  • Infrastructure for waste management
  • Community service
  • Sustainable practices
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