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some people consider price as most important thing to think about when buying product or service. do you agree or disagree.

#people #price #product #service
Few people look for the
price
 before getting the product or the service rather than quality. In my opinion, it has its own benefits and drawbacks which I would like to discuss
about
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them in the following paragraphs.
However
, I wouldn't say it is necessarily true. Many people from the
middle class
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 background, will use the
money
 based on their budget plans to save the
money
 for
the
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future purpose.
Accordingly
, they will spend their
money
 and because of
this
reason
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 they will observe the
price
 compare to its attributes.
Although
 it is good to put aside for future we must expend
good
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 amount of
money
 on our requirements.
For instance
, if we get
a goods
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 based on its
price
 and as its
price
 is less, its quality will
be low
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.
Hence
, it works only for
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 and later on it will be malfunctioned where we need to invest again. In the same way, if we consider poor grade services
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 example, medical facilities
then
 our life will be in danger if anything goes wrong. So, I think
best
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 way to buy a product or a service is that we must observe its
characterstics
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characteristics
 as in most
of
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the
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cases it will be a
life time
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 investment. Discussing
about
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the drawbacks, youth are getting more fascinated
towards
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 many things especially electrical goods that to only top brands and buying them without analyzing whether they need them or not. Not only that, they are squandering on the services like spa, celebrating grand and splendid weddings, birthday parties. In
such
 cases, we have many alternatives like we can acquire similar kind of products and get same services for
low
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price
 if we ignore its characteristics where we can save
money
.
Nevertheless
, they provide
a
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temporary happiness it is just a wastage of
money
. To sum up, I would tend to agree that we must consider the aspects of the products than giving more importance to
money
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, it implies
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our requirements only. When we aspire to buy somethings which is not crucial, in
such
 cases we can analyze its
price
.
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