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These days, in many countries fewer and fewer people want to become teachers, particularly in secondary schools. What are the reasons for this, and how could the problem be solved?

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Nowadays,
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 education is key to ensure a brighter future for the
next
 generation,
however
, schools have noticed that
less
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fewer
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 people have a desire to become
teachers
. High schools have noticed a shortage of
teachers
 applying for positions. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the possible reasons for
this
 problem and offer solutions
which
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 can be used to overcome
this
 problem.
Teachers
 are vital in the education system to ensure that
yougsters
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youngsters
 are well educated and ready to start their life after school.
However
, being
are
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teacher
 is considered a low paid job.
Teachers
 usually
work
 a lot of
after hours
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 preparing for their classes ensuring that their students are well equipped for
up coming
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 exams so that they can progress to the
next
 level in their education, but
teachers
 often don't get paid compensation for their extra hours.
In addition
, a lot of children and teenagers sometimes disrespect their
teachers
 and don't follow the class rules which could lead to depression and an unpleasant
work
 environment for the
teacher
.
This
 could contribute to
teachers
 feeling unvalued at their school of employment.
Eventhough
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Even though
 these problems are a serious matter there are solutions
how
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 to address them.
Firstly
,
teachers
 should be paid for what they are worth. In
return
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 the educators would feel recognised and valued for their hard
work
.
Secondly
,
teachers
 should be able to approach the principal or a
child
's parents if their
child
dont
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don't
doesn't
 want to co-operate in the classroom. The principal and parents should
back-up
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 the
teacher
 and address the
child
 behaviour together with the
teacher
. A
teacher
 who feels appreciated would contribute to a more pleasant
work
 environment. In conclusion,
teachers
 play an important role in an upbringing of a
child
. It is
therefore
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, crucial to value all
teachers
 input and compensate them for their hard
work
. So that there will be enough
teachers
 to
educatate
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educate
 children in the future.
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