Nowadays, some people claim that public museums and art galleries will not be needed because people can see historical objects and works of art by using a computer. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

With the development of digital technology, many
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argue that public
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and
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galleries
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will no longer be fashionable in the future.
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, I believe that those forms would not be replaced by the Internet. Indeed, that technology would allow
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to
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the arts from all around the world at home, especially for those
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who are disabled. It provides a convenient way and
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saves money to travel abroad.
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, it ignores the unique
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that
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brings. The appearance of the works can be copied relatively easily, but the real
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is difficult to
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. Only
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who go to the
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and
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galleries
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can look at the details of the
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closely in person and have a strong sense
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the author. And
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you are enjoying the
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, there are guides to help you attain a deeper understanding of the background.
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, many
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now have technological interactions,
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as AI communication and VR experiences. Allowing visitors to immerse themselves in interacting with artists across time. At the same time, some
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would set up some areas for
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to design their own artworks which is with the help of professional teachers. What’s more, the public
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and
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can allow
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to communicate with a real person, to share their thoughts. In conclusion, the development of computers which exactly brought
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more opportunities to understand
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and their histories. They still cannot replace the unique
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the
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and
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. In my opinion, I still think that they would not be replaced.

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coherence
Make sure every paragraph focuses clearly on one idea and supports your main argument. Try to link your ideas more clearly with words like 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'finally'.
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Use more examples from real life or specific artists to support your points. This will help make your argument stronger and clearer.
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Your introduction clearly states your opinion, which is a good way to start. It sets the tone for the essay.
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You mentioned modern technology and how it can enhance the experience of art, showing a good understanding of the topic.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
Topic Vocabulary:
  • virtual
  • digital
  • online
  • accessibility
  • inclusivity
  • cultural heritage
  • physical experience
  • immersion
  • local tourism
  • economy
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