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Student learn far more with their teachers than other sources (the Internet or television). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#student #teachers #sources #internet #television
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Some
people
 say that
students
 learn much more from their
teachers
 than they do from other sources of education,
such
 as the
internet
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Internet
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 or television. Personally, I believe that
although
people
 now have access to huge amounts of
information
 via the internet and television,
teachers
 do play a crucial role in a student’s learning. On the one hand, it is undeniable that
people
 now have access to a seemingly unlimited amount of
information
 via the
internet
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Internet
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.
This
 now makes it possible for some
people
 to completely educate themselves in almost any area of knowledge without leaving the comfort of their own home. With the use of
such
 websites as
Youtube
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YouTube
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, Kahn Academy, Alison, and other educational sites,
people
 can learn and study from a huge range of subjects and topics.
In addition
 to
this
, the increase in television channels in the past couple of decades has
also
 provided
people
 with
further
 potential sources of education.
However
,
although
 there is a wealth of
information
 at
people
’s fingertips these days, finding and sifting through the large amounts of material, to find accurate, reliable sources can
also
 present a problem, and
this
 is where
teachers
 can be of great benefit. Part of a teacher’s job is to have good knowledge of the subject they are teaching, and
this
 can ensure that
students
 learn from accurate and reliable knowledge. Another benefit that
teachers
 bring is guidance.
Teachers
 are trained to guide
students
 through their learning, by knowing different student’s needs and abilities and the most effective methods of teaching them, thereby enhancing the productivity of their learning. In conclusion,
although
 there are vast amounts of
information
 that can easily be accessed by all
people
, I believe that
teachers
 do play a vital role in the learning process of
students
.
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