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The major cities in the world are growing fast, as well as their problems. What are the problems that people living in cities are facing with? Give solutions to these problems

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due to advancement in technology, urban areas are growing rapidly in terms of infrastructure and Business-wise.
However
, the development is causing issues related to the environment as well as mental and physical
problems
. The essay aims to discuss
such
 issues and provide the solution to resolve them. Nowadays, due to the construction of subways, trams and buses, transportation is easily available from anywhere.
In addition
, it has
also
 become fast and reliable than before, which has made the lives of humans easy. People have to walk less now which makes their commute relaxing. Because of
this
, they have started becoming obese, as there is no physical activity which can help them burn some calories. So in order to solve
this
, the government should promote physical exercises by encouraging people to walk more or use cycles to cut small distances.
Furthermore
, people come to big cities for job opportunities. Due to
this
 fast life, there is less time to relax as everyone running towards achieving their future goals.
This
 has affected the mental health of a person due to deprivation of sleep and increasing stress level, which leads to various
problems
such
 as increased blood pressure, heart
problems
 etc. There are various mind control exercises
such
 as Yoga, deep breathing, meditation that can help overcome
such
problems
. To be concluded, with the growth of cities there is a rise in the
problems
 as well. But to control the problem, various measures need to be taken. By right education and
encouragement
Add a comma
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 these
problems
 can be resolved.
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