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Students at schools and universities learn far more from lessons with teachers than from other sources such as the internet, television. To what extent, do you agree or disagree with their opinion?

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Students
 get more knowledge from
lessons
 with
teachers
 than from other
sources
such
 as the internet or television. It is indisputable that
students
 might pay more attention in live classes than
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 by themselves.
However
, I believed that outer school
sources
 are important as well. Generally,
students
 in every school or university are taught by
teachers
 or professors because they are qualified and specialized in each lesson.
For example
, a math teacher can guide
students
 to calculate the number
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face to face
also
 teacher can have
conversation
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 with
student
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the student
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 directly when they have questions, while
study
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 from other
sources
need
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 their own
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 to understand the
lessons
.
This
 is why people think that children gain more knowledge when they take
lessons
 with
teacher
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 in live classes.
On the other hand
, most of
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 in schools are academic subjects
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 majoring in theory; thereby, the outer resources
such
 as
internet
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the internet
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 or television contain a variety of knowledge and it might broader
perspective
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 of children.
For instance
,
students
 can research up-to-date information on Google for their interest topics.
Moreover
, cartoons, movies or
documentaries
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 programs
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 televisions might contain astonishing viewpoint that
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 not have in theory books or academic classes. In conclusion, there are some benefits in both
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studying with
teachers
 and learning from outer
sources
. In my opinion, I agreed that
students
 might learn far more from
lessons
 with
teachers
 but I
also
 think that schools should concern about outer
sources
 study and let children learn by themselves.
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