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One of the most important issues facing the world today is a shortage of food and some think genetically modified foods are a possible solution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Lack of
food
 is the major problem nowadays.People are surviving due to a shortage of
food
 because in some cities and town
food
 is not adequate to provide properly.A school of thought that one of the most significant raises facing the globe in these days is a scarcity of
food
,whereas other contends that genetically foods resources are a feasible measure.I completely accord with
this
 statement and the reasons for my opinion will be elucidated in the forthcoming paragraphs.
To
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 conspicuous, there are numerous reasons
for
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why genetically
food
 is better for providing cuisine over the world,where individuals could get the delicacies easily.It means
food
 produces in a biotechnical way will save
the
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water and more wastage of
the
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resources.
For example
,a few years ago in Africa there always inadequate
food
 and humans can not get the
food
 easily which belongs to underprivileged strata of society.In 2018 their government had decided that they will generate the genetic
food
 with top-level testing biotechnology techniques,which actually works and now they can produce adequate
food
 in their nation.
In addition
 to it, there is one more reason that with the help of genetic
food
 people can eat more nutrients and protein,which
doesnot
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does not
doesn't
 get from the natural resources.
Moreover
,individuals can fit healthy and stay strong to consume the genetical
food
.To exemplify,modified apple has a rich amount of vitamin B,while the actual apple does not have
this
 type of vitamin. To conclude, the world facing many problems to overcoming the foods but the solutions are to produce more
food
 from
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genetically modified foods which save water and
food
,which is used for taking care of living things.
Also
,it supplies people with the foremost nutrients that increase their well-being.
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