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Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since computer techology is now replacing their functions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is sometimes argued that, with the introduction of
computers
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, the authorities should not waste money on the maintenance of public
libraries
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. While
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 could be the case for several reasons, my view is that traditional
libraries
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 have an important function that
computers
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 cannot perform and
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 should be maintained for public access. To a certain extent, computer technology can render
libraries
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 unimportant. Indeed, physical
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 provide readers with paper books or DVDs,
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, in limited numbers at certain times of the day, while an Internet-connected computer can bring even a limitless supply of digital-based information that can be accessed 24/7. There is
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 less effort involved in searching for digitalised information in a website or an e-book than in a large library. Based on the evidence above, virtual reading resources certainly provide a much more convenient user experience compared to their conventional counterpart.
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, in my view, there are certain roles of traditional
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 that
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 cannot take over,
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 they should be kept publicly accessible.
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, in a physical library, it is not difficult to find comfortable and quiet spaces to enjoy reading a book.
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 is highly beneficial, given the increasing number of sources of noise surrounding us these days.
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, library users have access to more reliable sources of information. A great deal of online content we have today, meanwhile, is not censored, which possibly leads to a misinformed public. In conclusion,
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computers
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 to a certain extent can replace traditional
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 in maintaining a well-informed society, I believe in the future
libraries
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 can be both online and offline to optimize their use.
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