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Band 6.5

You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorect. write a letter to the editor of the magazin.In your letter correct the information in the article explan why it is important for the magazin to give correct information suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

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Dear Sir or Madam, I would like to express my dissatisfaction with the incorrect information about my hometown Tula and its ecological issues that were described in your essay. The facts that were given are not correct or misinterpreted. The article says that the whole area of town is covered by smog. Though there are several big facilities around Tula and they pollute the air a lot, local governments have introduced new regulations that force the management of these fabrics to pay more attention to air filters and modernize purification systems. Since these upgrades were introduced in each plant the air become much cleaner. You literally can not find a place inside the living area of the city which would be covered by smoke or industrial fog. Your magazine is very popular and I think it is crucial for
such
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 media to give checked and correct information.
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, readers would
be mislead
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 about the topics of your articles.
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Furthermore
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 it could lower the credibility
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 your magazine. I would ask you to write a column which will explain that the previous article was outdated and a lot of ecological harmful factors no longer exist. Best regards, Vlad

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coherence cohesion
Make sure to clearly divide the text into well-structured paragraphs to improve readability.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of your letter are well-formulated and appropriate for this context.
task achievement
The letter addresses the task properly by correcting the information, explaining the importance of accuracy, and suggesting a solution.
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The tone of the letter is suitable, maintaining a polite and formal approach.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • incorrect information
  • misleading
  • rectify
  • significance
  • credibility
  • fact-based
  • accurate depiction
  • reliable sources
  • misinformation
  • influence public perception
  • tourist attraction
  • reputation
  • publish a correction
  • conduct research
  • consult local experts
  • accurate representation
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