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The cheaper availability of international transport means that more people are able to travel abroad these days. It is claimed that this is improving understanding among the world’s population. However, others believe it is better to use mass media to find out about more about the world. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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This
 essay will examine the aspect of travelling around the world to have your own reaction
of
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 cities, cultures and life and use mass news to make your
opinion
 about it. Whereas there are lots of information available through the internet, social news and
television
, the availability of travelling
is
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are
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 increasing in a different type of transport and making it possible to have a personal
opinion
 of different places. Ultimately, I believe the best option is to have your own impression. There are several reasons that support travelling abroad these days.
Firstly
, being abroad gives the possibility of touching other’s culture in every aspect: use local transport, bureaucracy to get the visa, experiment food. It is an immersive experience, being several hours in a place gives us an atmosphere about the place. Through mass media, it is not possible to eat local food, speak other languages use the transport to measure its efficiency.
Secondly
, there is a lot of knowledge
that is
 biased. Consuming information from someone else gives
additionally
 expectations that a person had about a
country
 or the point of
view
 the
television
 wants to diffuse, a local
television
 channel
that is
 more aligned with United States policy will likely give a good point of
view
 about the
country
 and shows all be benefits, well-fare state that
this
country
 may offer. influences and will determine if a person has a good or bad impact on a
country
. The
third
 point of
view
, the background and experiences influence all our opinions. Even if we follow an impartial influencer in social
television
,
this
 influencer has his own lifestyle, job experiences, travelling experiences. All these backgrounds have an influence in constructing our
view
 about a topic. Consuming an
opinion
 about a
country
 without travelling abroad will not give a person an opportunity to have the impression and
opinion
 that only his practice and an immersive experience would allow. In conclusion,
Although
 there are lots of resources that enable to consume information and
opinion
 about being in another
country
, travelling is the best choice to have your own impression your own background, expectations and immerse abroad.
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