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In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby. To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?

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Some people have a belief that income earned by them should not be taxed by the nation, but should
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 be retained by themselves. I unequivocally disagree with
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 an opinion because non-payment of
tax
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 results in severe damage to welfare facilities, and it
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 increases inequality. The
first
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 reason for my disagreement is that, without the payment of
tax
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, there would be terrible welfare facilities
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 as poor infrastructure, appalling medical services, and inferior education.
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 is because these are dependent on revenue generated by the government. Lower
tax
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 collection results in a shortage of money and, as a consequence, running, maintaining, and improving social amenities becomes challenging.
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, the United States of America reported
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 year that its highway projects, meant for easing congestion, had to be discontinued due to a lack of sufficient funds. A
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 reason is that non-collection of
tax
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 means the rich get richer and the poor get poorer. The fundamental objective of
tax
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 collection is to collect money from the rich and distribute it among the poor by way of welfare schemes. Not doing so reduces the funds available to the state, driving lower-income people to spend more money on basic necessities, which
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 lowers their income.
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, a study from the University of Dubai revealed that inequality increased by 23% in the year 2019 compared to 2018 in Gulf nations due to the lack of a taxation system. In conclusion, I firmly believe that
non-collection
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 of taxes by the administration leads to severe consequences socially and,
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, people should change their attitude towards funds and
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumerism
  • retail therapy
  • materialism
  • disposable income
  • economic growth
  • financial instability
  • environmental impact
  • social interaction
  • community building
  • emotional satisfaction
  • advertising influence
  • shopping habits
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