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In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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Shopping online is each day more popular. With that many applications has raised as
payment
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this
 new
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 easier to be done by cellphones. While there might always be the safety concern around online
payment
, these new apps have more convenient aspects than drawbacks,
such
 as given to shoppers more
payment
 options and cashback
oportunities
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opportunities
. In
phisical
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physical
 stores, there
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 a lot of beurocracy to take into consideration and that, sometimes, bothers the
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seller
 to offer different methods for a
costumer
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 to pay, like
credit
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 card, cash, invoice, deposit and so on. With an app many options are possible and that flexibility might attract more customers. Another advantage of apps is that
,
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 cashback is easier to apply. Researches
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 shown that receiving something back is a
powerfull
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 incentive when a buying decision is being made. Many people
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 how to pay based on what they can get back, and if
that is
 cash,
instead
 of a sample, they are more willing to choose that
payent
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payment
 method. To conclude, using an app for
purchaising
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purchasing
may
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be turn
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 as popular as shopping online
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 since everyone can gain from, flexible ways of
payment
 and
cashback
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 promotions.
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