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Nowadays people have greater access to fast food. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Fast
food
 restaurants are growing in numbers making varieties of easily made foods ready to pick for
people
 who have no time for cooking. In my perspective, the drawbacks of
this
 trend overcome its benefits.
This
 essay will explore my opinion in more detail. Needless to say that for some
people
 who have no time to cook, fast
food
 comes in handy. In fact, when one's in a hurry of going to school or work, it is very convenient to go to one of the grabs and go to restaurants and get the
food
 they like.
Moreover
, some
people
 like students are too busy to cook and are the number one customers of those fast-
food
 restaurants.
Besides
, they are mostly cheap and quickly made in front of your eyes, or they are already packed in the fridge and needs to be warmed up in a microwave or oven.
However
, the question is, are they healthy and has
this
 trend change our culture of preparing
food
 at home? Generally speaking, fast cuisine is not as healthy as homemade
food
. The reason lies in the fact that fast meal as it stands from its name, is
food
 that is prepared quickly, which means either from precooked or under very high temperate. While
this
 style of
food
 preparation is not healthy because the very high temperature can ruin the nutritional value of the
food
.
Also
, lots of high saturated oil,sugar and high caloric sauce are added to fast foods in order to taste better which are all toxins getting into our body.
Last
 but not least, the tradition of homestyle cooking is vanishing due to the presence of fast foods.
Thus
, they are not the best choice of a meal when it comes to health. To sum up, it seems to me that omnipresent fast
food
 which was claimed to make some
people
's life easy and is replacing our healthy homemade
food
 has more downsides than benefits.
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