Living in a house is better than living in an apartment. Do you agree and disagree.

Living in a
house
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has more advantages than living in an apartment. Some people favour
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whilst others have a contrasting viewpoint. I believe living in
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house
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a house
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has more advantages because
houses
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are airy and expandable. 
Firstly
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,
houses
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are airy which makes
these
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them
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more comfortable to live in. Humans need proper oxygen to breathe well.
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is the basic necessity of them. If the place where they live
in
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apply
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is airy,
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basic requirement is fulfilled. They feel comfortable and relax due to
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.
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,
sone
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some
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houses
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have gardens which have trees,
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helps to keep the
houses
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windy and cool.
Secondly
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,
houses
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are easy to expand.
Rooms
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in the
houses
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can be increased. If the requirement
of
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for
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rooms
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increase
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increases
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, new
rooms
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can be built.
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, generally with the birth of a child in the family,
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a children's
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room is needed. If
family
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the family
a family
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is staying in a
house
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, they can build new
rooms
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.
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is not possible
,
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if
family
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the family
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stays in an apartment.
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,
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advantage is enjoyable if families live in a
house
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. In conclusion, living in a
house
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has more advantages than in an apartment. I completely agree with
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notion because
houses
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are windy which helps people to breathe well and these are easy to expand, new
rooms
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can be built according to the requirement.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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