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In many countries plastic shopping bags are the main source of rubbish, causing pollution on land and in the water, so people think they should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is considered that
plastic
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bags
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 should be eliminated in society due to negative impacts on both
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the environment on land and in water. In my perspective,
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 banning
plastic
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bags
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 is necessary for the natural environment,
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society needs some conditions in order to follow a sustainable lifestyle
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 includes finance and culture.
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, in the fast-paced world, the convenience of
plastic
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bags
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 is
favorable
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 and using them has been a habit for a numerous number of people. Especially in Asia,
plastic
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bags
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 are a part of the culture due to the lifestyle which the residents have been committing for decades. In Vietnam,
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, almost everything in the country is related to
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 due to its convenient character, especially
plastic
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bags
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.
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, the major transportation in Vietnam are motorcycles and scooters,
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,
plastic
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bags
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 are usually hanged on the sides of the vehicle.
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, because purse snatching happens regularly in Vietnam,
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,
plastic
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become
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 preferable because it seems cheap and contains
unvaluable
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invaluable
 goods to the thefts.
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, many people use
plastic
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bags
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 to cover their valuable belongings to ensure their safety while driving.
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, banning
plastic
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bags
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 needs a long way to go for some cultures because changing habit takes a lot of time.
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, recycled products price usually high due to the expenses during
recycling
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 process.
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,
sustainable
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a sustainable
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 lifestyle is hard for certain groups of society to follow.
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,
plastic
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bags
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 are replaced by recycled
bags
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 in grocery stores,
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 will lead to a rise in either the groceries price or the expense of additional
bags
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 for shoppers.  In conclusion, it is undeniable that sustainable actions are necessary for the environment,
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 eliminating
plastic
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bags
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.
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, there are unfortunate aspects
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 a delay on environmentally friendly decisions.
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